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Cause-Effect Essay 2
Internet is an incredible network
which connects not only millions of computers but also thousands of social
groups. We are a part of elements which ensures functioning of this network.
Since the first day internet came to the Turkey, Turkey has changed and
developed so much. So, internet users, we had to keep up with these alterations
and developments. Nowadays, people meet with computer and internet from young
ages and they use internet and computer for different aims such as joy,
homework intensively. While using the internet, people can take advantage from it,
at the same time; they can take disadvantage from it. Whether they take
advantage or disadvantage from it is related to which aims they use the
internet. Internet has a lot of effects on people’s life, but it has
significant influences on especially people’s social life, psychology, and
health.
Firstly, internet affects
people’s social life on a large scale. People can use internet for different
aims. It offers to people unlimited written and visual content. So, people
prefer to read news and view different sources on internet instead of to read
newspaper to be able to reach the most accurate information. Nowadays, it is so
popular to use internet for shopping. The rising product variety of websites
which is related to online-shopping makes it attractive to people. Also people
can use it for communication. There are some social networks such as Twitter
and Facebook used worldwide. The use of these social networks causes people
both to socialize and not to socialize. People who use the social networks
consciously take advantage of them. Unconscious users don’t take advantage of
them. There are a lot of bad and good effects of internet on our life. One of
the good effects is that with beginning to be used internet technology in
utilities, e-government concept came out. With this e-government
implementation, the efficiency of public sector increased on a large scale. One
of the bad effects is that playing game so much is a big time loss; it steals
our time.
Secondly, internet generally
affects people’s psychology badly but it is generally not always. It can’t be
thought that there is a branch which doesn’t reflect people’s psychology. The
color of dress we wear, the smell of perfume we use, and our bed’s linen are
options of our psychology. Briefly, our psychology is affected by everything
easily and can affect our all decisions. With internet, people can reach
information easily and fast, search what comes to their mind, make new friends,
and express their thoughts freely, but sometimes people have to express them with
short texts. These all form a different psychology on people. If people don’t
have opportunities to do these, they may feel depressed and unhappy. As long as
we use the internet according to its aim and we use it in dose, it gives us
healthy results. Thanks to internet, we can tell the things we are shy and
timid about. Internet may also turn into a psychological disorder because of
the time are passed at the beginning of internet. For example, people spend so
much time by playing games at the beginning of internet and computer and they
can be addicted to game.
Thirdly, internet affects
people’s health both directly and indirectly. Today, one hand, internet makes
our life easier and we can do our works and task s while sitting at home
through internet. On the other hand, most of us are sitting at the beginning of
the computer and surfing on the internet. We don’t walk even in short distances
and we are phoning or talking on the internet instead of walking. We are paying
our bills on internet, doing our shopping on internet. These lead to
inactivity. We aren’t aware of this inactivity but it is so serious problem
which led to disorders such as headache, backache, eyestrain, and obesity.
Movement is so important for our health and human body needs to move to be
healthy. That people surf on internet during long hours and that the inactivity
blocks functioning our metabolism regularly prevent from moving. That our metabolism doesn’t work regularly
damages our health.
To sum up, there are pros and
cons of using internet. Sometimes we can take advantage and sometimes
disadvantage from using internet. Which aims do we use the internet and how
long do we use the internet? These are important things to take advantage from
it. Internet offers us easy ways to do our works but how we will do this work
is our decision. Internet affects our lifestyle, speech, relationship, culture,
morality, and eating and sleeping habits but it has noticeable effects on
people’s social life, psychology, and health. As a result, internet affects our
life willingly or unwillingly so, we try to use good features of internet not
bad features.
1) There should be a title.
YanıtlaSil2) at the same time;(punctuation) they can take disadvantage from it.
3) So, people prefer to read news and view (missing preposition)different sources on(missing article) internet instead of to (wrong structure) read newspaper to be able to reach the most accurate information.
As long as we use the internet according to (its) aim...
YanıtlaSilbut it is generally* not always*. (same things)
task s (space)
1) our works and task s* while sitting ---You must control this sentence
YanıtlaSil1-) Do not use "Internet" without an article
YanıtlaSil2-) Do not use abbreviations such as "doesn't" and "can't" when you write an essay.
** internet affects our life willingly or unwillingly so, we try to use good features of internet not bad features. (punctuation)
YanıtlaSil** Briefly, our psychology is affected by everything easily (revise the order of words)