23 Nisan 2014 Çarşamba

Cause-Effect Essay 2- First Draft


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Cause-Effect Essay 2

 

Internet is an incredible network which connects not only millions of computers but also thousands of social groups. We are a part of elements which ensures functioning of this network. Since the first day internet came to the Turkey, Turkey has changed and developed so much. So, internet users, we had to keep up with these alterations and developments. Nowadays, people meet with computer and internet from young ages and they use internet and computer for different aims such as joy, homework intensively. While using the internet, people can take advantage from it, at the same time; they can take disadvantage from it. Whether they take advantage or disadvantage from it is related to which aims they use the internet. Internet has a lot of effects on people’s life, but it has significant influences on especially people’s social life, psychology, and health.

Firstly, internet affects people’s social life on a large scale. People can use internet for different aims. It offers to people unlimited written and visual content. So, people prefer to read news and view different sources on internet instead of to read newspaper to be able to reach the most accurate information. Nowadays, it is so popular to use internet for shopping. The rising product variety of websites which is related to online-shopping makes it attractive to people. Also people can use it for communication. There are some social networks such as Twitter and Facebook used worldwide. The use of these social networks causes people both to socialize and not to socialize. People who use the social networks consciously take advantage of them. Unconscious users don’t take advantage of them. There are a lot of bad and good effects of internet on our life. One of the good effects is that with beginning to be used internet technology in utilities, e-government concept came out. With this e-government implementation, the efficiency of public sector increased on a large scale. One of the bad effects is that playing game so much is a big time loss; it steals our time.

Secondly, internet generally affects people’s psychology badly but it is generally not always. It can’t be thought that there is a branch which doesn’t reflect people’s psychology. The color of dress we wear, the smell of perfume we use, and our bed’s linen are options of our psychology. Briefly, our psychology is affected by everything easily and can affect our all decisions. With internet, people can reach information easily and fast, search what comes to their mind, make new friends, and express their thoughts freely, but sometimes people have to express them with short texts. These all form a different psychology on people. If people don’t have opportunities to do these, they may feel depressed and unhappy. As long as we use the internet according to its aim and we use it in dose, it gives us healthy results. Thanks to internet, we can tell the things we are shy and timid about. Internet may also turn into a psychological disorder because of the time are passed at the beginning of internet. For example, people spend so much time by playing games at the beginning of internet and computer and they can be addicted to game.

Thirdly, internet affects people’s health both directly and indirectly. Today, one hand, internet makes our life easier and we can do our works and task s while sitting at home through internet. On the other hand, most of us are sitting at the beginning of the computer and surfing on the internet. We don’t walk even in short distances and we are phoning or talking on the internet instead of walking. We are paying our bills on internet, doing our shopping on internet. These lead to inactivity. We aren’t aware of this inactivity but it is so serious problem which led to disorders such as headache, backache, eyestrain, and obesity. Movement is so important for our health and human body needs to move to be healthy. That people surf on internet during long hours and that the inactivity blocks functioning our metabolism regularly prevent from moving.  That our metabolism doesn’t work regularly damages our health.

To sum up, there are pros and cons of using internet. Sometimes we can take advantage and sometimes disadvantage from using internet. Which aims do we use the internet and how long do we use the internet? These are important things to take advantage from it. Internet offers us easy ways to do our works but how we will do this work is our decision. Internet affects our lifestyle, speech, relationship, culture, morality, and eating and sleeping habits but it has noticeable effects on people’s social life, psychology, and health. As a result, internet affects our life willingly or unwillingly so, we try to use good features of internet not bad features.

5 yorum:

  1. 1) There should be a title.
    2) at the same time;(punctuation) they can take disadvantage from it.
    3) So, people prefer to read news and view (missing preposition)different sources on(missing article) internet instead of to (wrong structure) read newspaper to be able to reach the most accurate information.

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  2. As long as we use the internet according to (its) aim...
    but it is generally* not always*. (same things)
    task s (space)

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  3. 1) our works and task s* while sitting ---You must control this sentence

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  4. 1-) Do not use "Internet" without an article

    2-) Do not use abbreviations such as "doesn't" and "can't" when you write an essay.

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  5. ** internet affects our life willingly or unwillingly so, we try to use good features of internet not bad features. (punctuation)
    ** Briefly, our psychology is affected by everything easily (revise the order of words)

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