Division Essay- First Draft

OUTLINE

Thesis Statement: In our country, weddings are celebrated three different places: at the rural area, at the wedding halls, and at homes in villages.

Body Paragraph 1

Topic: Generally, rich and famous people prefer to celebrate their weddings at the rural area.

1.0: no boiler and ready foods

2.0: bow-tied waiters and chairs with white linens and big ribbons

3.0: a few children

4.0: no song and an orchestra for only rhythm

5.0: green environment and clean air

6.0: a crown made of wildflowers

7.0: fairytale image

                                                          Body Paragraph 2

Topic: Middle class people prefer to celebrate their weddings at the wedding halls.

1.0: hall wedding as a common type

2.0: renting wedding halls before

3.0: going to wedding hall before to applaud

4.0: dancing

5.0: beginning to play guests

6.0: being worn jewelries

7.0: orchestra and service

8.0: being offered cake, soft drinks, and nuts

9.0: family photos

                                                          Body Paragraph 3

Topic: People in villages generally celebrate their weddings at home no matter how rich or poor they are because their customs and traditions are reflected in village weddings with the best way.

1.0: customs and traditions

1.1: being played drums and flutes

2.0: being crowded and a lot of children

3.0: meals such as pies, desserts…

4.0: having traditional play

5.0: halay as a common play

6.0: the mutual plays

        Conclusion Paragraph

WEDDINGS IN OUR COUNTRY

Weddings are among the ceremonies which express the happiness of the people in Turkish culture like all the world cultures no matter where it happens. There are a lot of functions of weddings. They help people to have fun, provide them a chat environment, reinforce solidarity, and enrich life. In addition to these good functions, where we celebrate the wedding is important for people as they marry once. In our country, weddings are celebrated three different places: at the rural area, at the wedding halls, and at homes in villages.

Generally, rich and famous people prefer to celebrate their weddings at the rural area. There is no boiler in country weddings and meals come from the kitchen readily. Bow-tied waiters serve and chairs are dressed with white linens and big ribbons. There are a few children running around bride and groom and tables. There is no song, orchestra only keep the rhythm. Everywhere is so green and there are clean air and wildflowers. Bride wears a crown made of wildflowers which is epitome of country wedding. This type of wedding has a fairytale image.

Middle class people prefer to celebrate their weddings at the wedding halls. Hall wedding is the most common wedding type in our country. People rent wedding halls for one evening or afternoon a few months ago. Relatives of bride and groom, guests come to wedding hall before the time of wedding to welcome bride and groom with applause. Bride and groom come to scene and dance for a while. When the bride and groom sit, the guests play what they want to play. Jewelries of the sides of the girl and boy are worn to bride by announcements. There is an orchestra and refreshments are served by waiters. Especially cake and soft drinks are offered to guests and it is also common to offer nuts to guests. Finally, family photos are taken.

People in villages generally celebrate their weddings at home no matter how rich or poor they are because their customs and traditions are reflected in village weddings with the best way. There are a lot of customs and traditions. For example; drums and flutes are played in village weddings but it isn’t suitable to be played drums and flutes in country wedding. Village wedding is so crowded there are a lot of children running around bride and groom. In terms of food, their menu is so crowded: there are pies, desserts, fruits, and meats. Plays of village weddings differ from region to region and every region has a unique and traditional play. However, halay is played in most village weddings. Except for halay, the mutual plays which our women and men play together or separately are played in most village weddings commonly.

Our weddings are the most beautiful examples which reflect our culture. We have three types wedding and they are country wedding, hall wedding, and village wedding. Although we have three types of wedding, we can reflect our culture in village wedding highly but in our country the most common wedding type is hall wedding. It means that we are forgetting our cultural values.

2. Comparison and Contrast Essay-Second Draft

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Comparison and Contrast Essay

OUTLINE

Thesis Statement: However, there are a lot of differences between letter as a communication tool and e-mail as a communication way that we can compare.

Body Paragraph 1

Topic Sentence: Firstly, letter is one of the oldest communication tools.

1.0: letter’s permanence and letter as a memory

2.0: slow communication tool and the slowness of arriving letter

2.1: teaching to be patient

3.0: long texts

3.1: one or more than papers

4.0: feeling the letter with three senses

5.0: reading and burning letter in different times

6.0: necessities such as harmony, order, and grammar rules

6.1: taking care of spelling rules

7.0: writing about long processes

8.0: postman and giving letters to post-office

8.1: making logical decisions while giving letter to post-office

9.0: letter song and letter’s traditional feature

10.0: requirements such as paper, pencil to write letter

Conclusion Sentence: As a result, writing letter isn’t an easy job and people generally write letters people they love and value.

Body Paragraph 2

Topic Sentence: Secondly, nowadays, e-mail is so popular communication way.

1.0: the speed of sending e-mail

2.0: mentioning only one topic in e-mails

3.0: advertisement e-mails

3.1: deleting these advertisement e-mails

4.0: unnecessary harmony and order for e-mail

5.0: not finding topic to talk about

6.0: not taking care of grammar and spelling rules

7.0: writing e-mail angrily and nervously because of easiness

8.0: not requiring money and effort

9.0: not permanent

10.0: necessary things such as computer and internet

Conclusion Sentence: As a result, sending e-mail is an easy job and e-mail doesn’t require so much rules.

Conclusion Paragraph:

1. Summarizing

2. Recommending: To provide people to use letters more common, we should teach children how to write letters correctly and inform about its merit in schools.

 

Letter and E-mail

Every human needs to communicate with other people to sustain life and nowadays, communication is a requirement as important as eating and drinking for people. People use different ways to keep in touch each other. Two of them are letter and e-mail. They are similar to each other. However, there are a lot of differences between letter as a communication tool and e-mail as a communication way that we can compare.

Firstly, letter is one of the oldest communication tools. The most important feature of letter is being permanent and letters are important and valuable memories for people. On the other hand, letter is a slow communication tool; it takes one day or more than one day to reach the address we sent. So, it teaches people to wait and be patient. Texts are generally long in letters and there are a lot of things to write. So, papers may be more than one or two. It is also important that we feel letter paper with three senses which are sense of sight, sense of touch, and even sense of smell. While letter can be read repeatedly in longing and separation times, it also can be burned in aversion times. There are harmony and order in letters and it requires basic grammar rules. Even if people don’t know grammar rules, people try to take care of spelling rules. Long processes such as weeks, months, and even years are written thoroughly in letters. There is also a postman in letters and preparing letters and giving them to post-office take so much time. This time provides us to make more logical decisions. Letters are traditional and we have even a song related to letter which is ‘bak postacı geliyor selam veriyor’. There are effort and toil in letters they are necessary things; paper, pencil, stamp, envelope, time, and money to be able to write and send a letter. As a result, writing letter isn’t an easy job and people generally write letters people to they love and value.

Secondly, nowadays, e-mail is so popular communication way. E-mail is so fast that it takes only a few seconds to reach person we sent. People generally mention only one subject in e-mails. Most of e-mails which are sent us are generally related to advertisements. Sometimes, while we are deleting these advertisements, some important e-mails which our relatives and friends send us may be overlooked and deleted without being read. It isn’t necessary harmony and order for e-mails, it is written like chatting. Even though the process or time which people talk about is long, people don’t find something to write. So, this question comes out ‘how are things with you?’ People don’t take care of grammar rules and spelling rules in e-mails. Another point is that it may be written in an angry and nervous mood as it is so fast and easy. There isn’t something concrete in e-mails so, they aren’t permanent. Computer and internet are only necessary to send an e-mail. As a result, sending e-mail is an easy job and e-mail doesn’t require so much rules.

To sum up, as the differences we see in letters and e-mails, e-mails are faster to send and easier to write than letters. So, people use e-mails more than letters. We can say that today letter isn’t almost used and most people don’t know even how to be written letter. But it is something traditional, beautiful, and it is a memory for us. To provide people to use letters more common, we should teach children how to write letters correctly and inform about its merit in schools. People send letters to people who they attach importance because it is believed that letter is more important than the expensive gift you will buy and the romantic dinner you will bring.

 

 

 

 

comparison and contrast essay 2

Meral Bakırcı

Comparison and Contrast Essay

OUTLINE

Thesis Statement: However, there are a lot of differences between letter as a communication tool and e-mail as a communication way that we can compare.

Body Paragraph 1

Topic Sentence: Firstly, letter is one of the oldest communication tools.

1.0: letter’s permanence and letter as a memory

2.0: slow communication tool and the slowness of arriving letter

2.1: teaching to be patient

3.0: long texts

3.1: one or more than papers

4.0: feeling the letter with three senses

5.0: reading and burning letter in different times

6.0: necessities such as harmony, order, and grammar rules

6.1: taking care of spelling rules

7.0: writing about long processes

8.0: postman and giving letters to post-office

8.1: making logical decisions while giving letter to post-office

9.0: letter song and letter’s traditional feature

10.0: requirements such as paper, pencil to write letter

Conclusion Sentence: As a result, writing letter isn’t an easy job and people generally write letters people they love and value.

Body Paragraph 2

Topic Sentence: Secondly, nowadays, e-mail is so popular communication way.

1.0: the speed of sending e-mail

2.0: mentioning only one topic in e-mails

3.0: advertisement e-mails

3.1: deleting these advertisement e-mails

4.0: unnecessary harmony and order for e-mail

5.0: not finding topic to talk about

6.0: not taking care of grammar and spelling rules

7.0: writing e-mail angrily and nervously because of easiness

8.0: not requiring money and effort

9.0: not permanent

10.0: necessary things such as computer and internet

Conclusion Sentence: As a result, sending e-mail is an easy job and e-mail doesn’t require so much rules.

Conclusion Paragraph:

1. Summarizing

2. Recommending: To provide people to use letters more common, we should teach children how to write letters correctly and inform about its merit in schools.

 

Letter and E-mail

Every human needs to communicate other people to sustain life and nowadays, communication is as important requirement as eating and drinking for people. People use different ways to keep in touch each other. Two of them are letter and e-mail. They are similar to each other. However, there are a lot of differences between letter as a communication tool and e-mail as a communication way that we can compare.

Firstly, letter is one of the oldest communication tools. The most important feature of letter is being permanent and letters are important and valuable memories for people. On the other hand, letter is a slow communication tool, it takes one day or more than one day to arrive the address we sent. So, it teaches people to wait and be patient. Texts are generally long in letters and there are a lot of things to write. So, papers may be more than one or two. It is also important that we feel letter paper with three senses which are sense of sight, sense of touch, and even sense of smell. While letter can be read repeatedly in longing and separation times, it also can be burned in aversion times. There are harmony and order in letters and it requires basic grammar rules. Even if people don’t know grammar rules, people try to take care of spelling rules. Long processes such as weeks, months, and even years are written thoroughly in letters. There is also a postman in letters and preparing letters and giving them post-office take to time. This time provide us to make more logical decisions. Letters are traditional and we have even a song related to letter which is ‘bak postacı geliyor selam veriyor’. There are effort and toil in letters they are necessary paper, pencil, stamp, envelope, time, and money to be able to write and send a letter. As a result, writing letter isn’t an easy job and people generally write letters people they love and value.

Secondly, nowadays, e-mail is so popular communication way. E-mail is so fast that it takes only a few seconds to reach person we sent. People generally mention only one subject in e-mails. Most of e-mails which are sent us are generally related to advertisements. Sometimes, while we are deleting these advertisements, some important e-mails which our relatives and friends send us may be overlooked and deleted without being read. It isn’t necessary harmony and order for e-mails, it is written like chatting. Even though the process or time which people talk about is long, people don’t find something to write. So, this question comes out ‘how are things with you?’ People don’t take care of grammar rules and spelling rules in e-mails. Another point is that it may be written in an angry and nervous mood as it is so fast and easy. There isn’t something concrete in e-mails so, they aren’t permanent. Computer and internet are only necessary to send an e-mail. As a result, sending e-mail is an easy job and e-mail doesn’t require so much rules.

To sum up, as the differences we see in letters and e-mails, e-mails are faster to send and easier to write than letters. So, people use e-mails more than letters. We can say that today letter isn’t almost used and most people don’t know even how to be written letter. But it is something traditional, beautiful, and it is a memory for us. To provide people to use letters more common, we should teach children how to write letters correctly and inform about its merit in schools. People send letters to people who they attach importance because it is believed that letter is more important than the expensive gift you will buy and the romantic dinner you will bring.

 

 

 

 

Second draft-The Lives of Men and Women in my Country

Meral Bakırcı

March 7, 2014

Comparison and Contrast Essay

THE LIVES OF MEN AND WOMEN IN MY COUNTRY

While  human  is  extremely  important  creature  in  our  world , why  does  the importance   which  is  attached  to  human  change  from  culture  to  culture  according  to  human’s  gender?There  are  a lot  of  differences  between  the  lives  of  men and  women  in  my  country :  the  role  of  women  and  men  in  family ,  women’s  and  men’s  role  in  business , and  men’s  and  women’s  literacy  rate.

The first  difference  is  men  and  women’s  roles  in  a  family.There  is  so  big  difference  between  their  roles.Men generally  decide about  children’s  life and think about their future more than women.The  arbiter  in  family  is  generally  father.Women  listen  their husband  and  respect  their opinions.In  my  country  while  women  have  more  rights  than  men  over  children , men  have  more  authority  over  children.Likewise  boys  have  more  authority  than  girls  in  family  when  we  take  into  consideration their  boys and  girls  or  sisters  and  brothers.So , men  have  more  rights  in  family.

The second  difference  is  business life.Generally  men  work  and men  don’t  allow   their  wives  to  work.Likewise  fathers  don’t  allow  their  girls  to  work  as  they  observe  their  family  in   this  wise.According  to  men’s  understanding  in  my  country , women  look  after  their  children , clean  house , and  cook dinner  and women do them.Generally they don’t work outside.This   understanding  is also  valid  for  young  girls.While  boys  are  working  even  at  young  age , girls’  working  in  a  factory  or  somewhere  else  isn’t  tolerated  and  allowed.As  a  result , men  have  extremely  active  business  life , women  are  generally  expected  to  be  housewife.

The  last  difference  is  men  and  women’s  literacy.Generally  men’s  literacy rate is higher than women as girls  are doing housework while boys are sent to school.Only  some  families  send  their  girls  to  school, so  only some women are literate.Boys and men  do  what  they  want  to  do.They  are  quite  free  to  make  their  decisions.They  may  go  to  the  school ,  work  in a  factory  or  somewhere  else  while  women  are dealing  with  sewing  and  embroidery  instead  of  going  to  school.Girls help their mothers and then they  are  married  by  their  parents.So , most  of  our women  don’t  know  reading  and  writing.

To  sum up , as  people  give  more  importance  boys  than  girls , boys and  men  are  more  lucky  and  valuable  in  my  country  because  of  their  liberty  of  all  decisions  while  women  aren’t  still  completely  independent  about  their  life.

OUTLİNE

Background Information : While human is  extremely  important…

Thesis Statement : There are  a lot of  differences…

I.First  difference  is  man  and  woman’s roles  in  a family.

                     A.Men

                      1.men’s free decisions

   2.father in family  as an  arbitor

  B.Women

   1.woman’s  respect  and  obedience against  her  husband’s decisions

                       2.about  men’s  authority  over  children

                      C.boys and girls

   1.being more authoritative boys compared to girls  in  family

Conclusion Sentence : So , men have more rights in family.

II.Second  difference is  business life

A.Men

1.can work where they want to

2. don’t  allow  their wives  and girls  to  work

B.Women

1. look  for  their  children  and  do  housework

2.don’t work outside

C.Boys and girls

1.Boys  work  where they  want to  work  but  girl’s  working  isn’t  tolerated.

Conclusion Sentence : As a result , men have extremely active…

III.The last  difference is man  and  woman’s literacy

A.Men

1.  more literate

2.may  go to school or work in a factory or somewhere else

B.Women

1. quite less literate than men

2. deal with sewing and embroidery  instead of going to school in  addition to housework

C.Boys and girls

1.Boys are free to make their decisions  while  girls are married by their parents.

Conclusion Sentence : So , most  of  our  women  don’ t  know…

Conclusion Paragraph : To sum up , as  people  give  more  importance  boys  than  girls….

essay

Comparison and Contrast Essay

Meral BAKIRCI

 

THE LIVES OF MEN AND WOMEN IN MY COUNTRY

While  human  is  extremely  important  creature  in  our  world , why  does  the importance   which  is  attached  to  human  change  from  culture  to  culture  according  to  human’s  gender?There  are  a lot  of  differences  between  the  lives  of  men and  women  in  my  country :  the  role  of  women  and  men  in  family ,  woman  and  man’s  role  in  business , and  men's  and  women’s  literacy  rate.

 

The first  difference  is  men  and  women’s  roles  in   family.There  is  so  big  difference  between  their  roles.Men generally  decide   about  their  children  and  children’s   life.The  arbiter  in  family  is  generally  father.Women  listen  their  husband  and  respect  their   opinions.In  my  country  while  women  have  more  rights  than  men  over  children , men  have  more  authority  over  children.Likewise  boys  have  more  authority  than  girls  in  family  when  we  take  into  consideration their  boys and  girls  or  sisters  and  brothers.So , men  have  more  rights  in  family.

 

The second  difference  is  business life.Generally  men  work  and  they    don’t  allow   their  wives  to  work.Likewise  fathers  don’t  allow  their  girls  to  work  as  they  observe  their  family  in   this  wise.According  to  men’s  understanding  in  my  country , women  should  look  after  their  children , clean  house , and  cook  dinner  and women also  do them.Generally they don’t work outside.This   understanding  is also  valid  for  young  girls.While  boys  are  working  even  at  young  age , girls’  working  in  a  factory  or  somewhere  else  isn’t  tolerated  and  allowed.As  a  result , men  have  extremely  active  business  life , women  are  generally  expected  to  be  housewife.

The  last  difference  is  men  and  women’s  literacy.Generally  men’s  literacy rate is higher than women as girls  are doing housework while boys are sent to school.Only  some  families  send  their  girls  to  school, so  only some women are literate.Boys and men  do  what  they  want  to  do.They  are  quite  free  to  make  their  decisions.They  may  go  to  the  school ,  work  in a  factory  or  somewhere  else  while  women  are dealing  with  sewing  and  embroidery  instead  of  going  to  school.Girls help their mothers and then they  are  married  by  their  parents.So , most  of  our women  don’t  know  reading  and  writing.

To  sum up , as  people  give  more  importance  boys  than  girls , boys and  men  are  more  lucky  and  valuable  in  my  country  because  of  their  liberty  of  all  decisions  while  women  aren’t  still  completely  independent  about  their  lifes.

 

 

 

OUTLINE

Backround Information : While human is  extremely  important…

Thesis Statement : There are  a lot of  differences…

 

I.First  difference  is  man  and  woman’s roles  in  a family.

                     A.Men

                      1.men’s free decisions

   2.father in family  as an  arbitor

  B.Women

   1.woman’s  respect  and  obedience against  her  husband’s decisions

                       2.about  men’s  authority  over  children

                      C.boys and girls

   1.being more authoritative boys compared to girls  in  family

Conclusion Sentence : So , men have more rights in family.

 

II.Second  difference is  business life

A.Men

1.can work where they want to

2. don’t  allow  their wives  and girls  to  work

B.Women

1. look  for  their  children  and  do  housework

2.don’t work outside

C.Boys and girls

1.Boys  work  where they  want to  work  but  girl’s  working  isn’t  tolerated.

Conclusion Sentence : As a result , men have extremely active…

 

III.The last  difference is man  and  woman’s literacy

A.Men

1.  more literate

2.may  go to school or work in a factory or somewhere else

B.Women

1. quite less literate than men

2. deal with sewing and embroidery  instead of going to school in  addition to housework

C.Boys and girls

1.Boys are free to make their decisions  while  girls are mmarried by their parents.

Conclusion Sentence : So , most  of  our  women  don’ t  know…

 

Conclusion Paragraph : To sum up , as  people  give  more  importance  boys  than  girls….