2 Mayıs 2014 Cuma

Argumentative Essay- First Draft


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Argumentative Essay 1

SHOULD THE TUITION BE FREE IN UNIVERSITY EDUCATION?

Education is one of the most important factors not only for countries’ development but also people’s development as the purpose of education is to provide both countries’ needs and requirements and people’s needs and requirements. These days, it has been an argument among people that while people find money to give courses, why do not they find money to give their tuition? It is an incorrect thought and university education should be tuition free since it is an obstacle for some people to go to university, it is against to the equality of opportunity in education, and it reduces the time students distinguish to the education and themselves in some ways.

The tuition is an obstacle in front of both students and families. Some people do not go to the university because of their financial situation and some factors like tuition, eating and sheltering expenses lead to some people not to go to the university. Somehow people provide their sheltering and eating expenses but tuition is really a big problem for students. When we compare with other countries, our education level is so low and it is not correct for our country to receive money for education. Because the development of one country economically and socially becomes with education. Our economy needs to educated people and there are no enough educated people. People who do not go to university generally have a limited social life. As education provides people’s development and countries’ development in all respects, it should not be an obstacle in front of them.

The tuition is against to the equality of opportunity in education. Students pay different amount of money according to which department they are studying. While going anyone to the university is an asset both for individuals and for society as a whole, it is wrong to be paid money to the government for education as it is useful for government future. The tuition which students pay does not provide the training costs of government and it only creates financial problems for students. While tuition is even low, students and families have difficulties to pay it. While students have troubles to pay, raising the tuition is not correct. While students are struggling with intensive lesson tempo, they are thinking about tuition on the top of it. This makes their level of success lower and it also makes the society’s level of success lower. For the survival of society, it is necessary for individuals to make an effort. While individuals make an effort for society, the government should support them instead of receiving money for education. So, university education should be tuition free.

It decreases student’s time which was dedicated to the education and themselves in some ways. Some students are working to pay the tuition. As a result of work, they do not find time to study or they are being tired. So, they fail in their exams. They have much more responsibilities than other students who do not work. They have to go to the school, they have to work, and they have to study lesson. They have a routine life between work and school. Because of work, they do not concentrate on their lessons and it creates problems with their lessons. So they fail in their exams. As a result, the level of success decreases and it is a loss both for individual and society. Another point is that generally the students from poor families have to study to pay the tuition. While it is expected from our government to support these students, our government is expecting the tuition from them. Education is so important thing for one country’s development and our country’s education level is so lower than most countries. The reason of this situation is that university education is so expensive in our country. So, university education should be tuition free and our government should offer a qualified education which is in the same level and conditions.

To sum up, the tuition should not be in universities as it is a barrier for students to go the university, it does not provide the equality of opportunities to all citizens in education, and it lessens the time which students dedicate to the education and and themselves.

 

4 yorum:

  1. 1. the government should support them instead of receiving money for education. So, university education should be tuition free.( before so, you shouldn't use point. You should combine sentences)(paragraph 3)

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  2. 1)Your conclusion paragraph is too short. It disorganizes your paragraphs.
    2)..it lessens the time which students dedicate to the education and and themselves.=> Delete one of them 'and'.

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  3. 1) Somehow people provide their sheltering and eating expenses (punctuation) but tuition is really a big problem for students.
    2) Because the development of one country economically and socially becomes with education. ---> You should not use "because" like that.
    3) Students pay different amount of money according to which (word order) department they are studying.

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  4. 1)SHOULD THE (capitalization)TUITION BE FREE IN UNIVERSITY EDUCATION?---tittle
    2) It is an incorrect thought and (instead of and you can write that) university education should be tuition free since it is an obstacle for some people to go to university,

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